Group: Roughcut and Feedback

> The lipsyncing should not be at the beginning because the audience should feel distant from him at this point.
> The beginning shots seem out of place because he is at the edge of the roof and then he is walking away from the edge and then back at the edge.
> The narrative is slightly unclear.
> The London shots are not clear that they are in his mind. They need to be more fantastical.
> On the rooftop it would be a good transition if we juxtapose shots of him closing his eyes on the rooftop and then he opens his eyes in London.
> The colour is too bright in London it needs to be richer.
> The ending shot could be one of him walking away from the edge so the conclusion is he walks away.